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My brightly burning ice giant; god of fire,
My silver tongued lie-smith with weighted whispers—
Will you still love me on Ragnarök's byre?
When your children wage war on their elders?

For the nine realms will be nothing but chaos,
And each will sit back to watch the destruction
For none shall be able to forestall this loss,
Or find another world to which they can run.

If you say yes; that you will adore me yet…
Should I trust those lips which kiss me sweetly?
That weave such beautiful tricks, traps and nets
To trip and catch the Æsir and their army.

Tell me, if it should be my breath leaves first,
Should you take another into our bed?
Or should you deem this world to be accursed,
And wait for the fates to cut immortal thread.
The Canzone

Submission for DFC 2012 - 2nd December


The last line of this links in more with Greek mythology than Norse, but I like the idea and it seemed to work within the poem.
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...It's beautiful dearie... Truly beautiful!

I like that you incorporated various terms from the Norse and its mythologies... it shows you did your research... which is very important in pieces like this...

I also enjoy the way you make it clear who the subject is... without calling the much beloved trickster by name... takes a bit of talent/work to do that dearie!

And finally it's lovely how she isn't blissfully ignorant of the fact that his deceitful ways might turn on her... it is most refreshing!

Good luck with the whole DFC thing... and keep up the good work dearie!
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BrokenTales Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013   Writer
Congratulations! :happybounce: You've been featured in our Weekly Round-up! :clap:

Thank you for sharing with the group!

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parchmentgirl Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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DenVitaNarren Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
You truly have an outstanding descriptive language: capturing! Awe is the first word that comes to mind when I try to describe what I felt when reading this poem. :)

And I think the last line works for Norse mythology as well. :)
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parchmentgirl Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much for the praise, and thank you also for the watch. It is so nice to see my work being well received. :)
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DenVitaNarren Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
Thank you for writing such wonderful work. :)
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